"Innocence is Bliss"

This essay begins with a happy tone about an important relationship in the author’s life. She seemed to really like the boy even though it was just a middle school relationship. Throughout the whole essay, the author describes the different activities involving her sweetheart. In all of the descriptions, words of excitement are used to express the feeling of the entire summer after eighth grade. “As we pulled up to the baseball diamonds, I was nearly jumping out of my seat in excitement.” The author even took time to brag about her athletic boyfriend saying,

“When Colin struck out three batters in a row, we hopped up and waved our dazzling dark blue pom-poms around. I was Colin’s biggest fan and the whole crowd knew it.”

Suddenly by the very end of the essay, the author reflects on the summer with a slight bit of sadness by saying, “I was the happiest I had ever been… I knew nothing would ever be the same again.” This is a nice contrast to sum up the essay with some emotional connection for the reader.

Painting With Neil

The author opens with an introduction of the main character, Neil Rajdev. Wasting no time, the author quickly describes Neil “already having a frown on his face”. This quick detail sets up what seems will be a depressing observation. Soon after the sad start, Neil is then portrayed as being bossy, short tempered, and pessimistic. Last but not least, Neil observes the score of the soccer game he is attending and the team he is rooting for is losing. This essay of depressing descriptions seems to never end. Finally in the second paragraph, Neil is overcome with joy as his team finally scores a goal. The essay continues to describe Neil’s rollercoaster of emotions which seem to directly correlate with the performance of his soccer team. When his team does well, he is happy. When his team does poorly, he is angry. If I had never met Neil and only knew him from this essay, I don’t think he would be a guy that I would want to be friends with.

Just finished up my first essay. I think it could be considered slightly offensive and conservative, but its all just for fun.

"Ground Zero"

Berne’s essay, “Ground Zero” depicts the disheartened and sorrowful emotions inflicted by the sight of ground zero soon after September 11, 2001. In the second paragraph, Berne describes the many various nationalities of tourists who concurrently visited the site. Also she notices many different age groups in the same area. These descriptions help explain the serious environment of such a distressed situation. Everyone wanted to see it in person. Berne also explains the partial ignorance of some first-time visitors to the area.  She described ground zero to seem “like a construction site” to an “out-of-town” viewer. Sadly, after some moments of observation, the tragic realization of the situation starts to set in.

“Suddenly you notice the periphery, the skyscraper shrouded in black plastic, the boarded windows, the steel skeleton of the shattered Winter Garden.”

One of the last things described by Berne was the agitated behavior of local officials towards tourists. A police officer rudely responded by asking, “you want tickets to the disaster”, after she asked for directions to the ticket booth for a better viewing area.

                With her many descriptions varying from grief, sorrow, curiosity, confusion, and aggravation, Suzanne Berne accurately described the overwhelming emotions caused by the sight of such a horrific disaster.

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